Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: World Peace is Fictiondots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: rosesrouges
    Elite Ratio:    2.93 - 32/42/42
    Words: 166
    Class/Type: Poetry/Society
    Total Views: 582
    Average Vote:    4.5000
    Bytes: 1173



    Description:
       Ahh. okay ( :


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsWorld Peace is Fictiondots
    -------------------------------------------


    Perfect.
    We are perfect- are we not?
    We are crafted to think and to feel.
    To please and to hurt.
    To live and to kill.
    Our perfections have created a world to which horror thrives and the children live in such morbid conefinment.

    Wars.
    What are they?
    The insanity cruel ideology to oppose the PEACE.
    Make peace, not WAR.
    Unfortunately Miss Universe, your hope for World Peace will never emerge in such pandemonium.

    Love.
    Something you want but can't get.
    Something you get but it hurts.
    The perilous adventure to which the heart untwine.
    A fairy-tale- in my opinion.

    Justice.
    A cartoon you just hate.
    The freedom you can't make.

    Hatred.
    The thing that makes the world go round.
    The abhorrence of such intense feeling to make a once sane person insane.
    Powerpuff girls.

    Random.
    A slapdash post by mere coincidence.
    A lackluster post.

    You.
    A wonderful individual took time to read my crappy post.
    -
    PEACE.




    Submitted on 2008-03-14 10:26:57     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      I loved the fact that you used a mini header to every stanza and then go on to describe with it making sense and for the last part one of a kind... good job

    BVG
    | Posted on 2008-03-19 00:00:00 | by b_v_grant | [ Reply to This ]
      love the conversational tone to this, and the important topics you bring up: all very true and relatable, definitely.

    this would go down really well in a spoken word environment, i think. you have that relaxed feeling which immediately makes people empathise...
    ~
    | Posted on 2008-03-15 00:00:00 | by silent strings | [ Reply to This ]
      I very much liked this. I liked the way you set a line of a single word at the top of each stanza, and then went in, filling out it's concept. I personally haven't seen many like this. And I like that you put powerpuff girls in there under hate. It takes the poem from feeling too generalized, to feeling like a peek inside your head. (not to mention that I loathe that show). And I love the ending of the stanza under perfect. It really does go to show that taking perfectionism to extremes always ends badly, it immdeiately left me thinking of Hitler. I very much liked the depth, wording and formatting overall.
    | Posted on 2008-03-14 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      i really liked it. but some parts really didnt sound right together. i liked the part about love because it is so true. i feel like i can relate to it
    | Posted on 2008-03-14 00:00:00 | by xxFallenAngelxx | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    158986

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry