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    dots Submission Name: helpping people sucksdots
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    Author: draconus
    ASL Info:    23/MALE/UK
    Elite Ratio:    1.89 - 49/101/59
    Words: 106
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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       just felt the words come to me. sorry if it is bad


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    dotshelpping people sucksdots
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    if it is one thing i have learnt today
    as i sit and talk about life.
    it is to never help another.

    why? you may ask.
    because you get nothing in return
    or it will get thrown in your face

    you may not trust this
    but in time you will.

    so in the furture think about the choises?
    help them and get hurt
    or
    don't help and only they get hurt.

    i know what i would choose
    without a second thought

    but what about you
    yes you dear reader you

    what you'd do
    i'll leave to you.........





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      throw in some examples if you could fit them in. relay more reasons why you aren't obligated to help anyone. i selfishness/nihilism. i like the last two lines. i enjoyed this a lot.
    | Posted on 2008-03-16 00:00:00 | by dorianrydell | [ Reply to This ]
      Hmm.I believe in karma(well sthg like this) so i kinda disagree with the helping people thing. but its great to voice out what you feel- and like you said, you felt the words coming to you. more metaphors maybe? ( :
    | Posted on 2008-03-16 00:00:00 | by rosesrouges | [ Reply to This ]
      Ok, wow, this is bitter. I found there were a good bit of spelling errors as well (ie, choices.) I didn't like it very much. It doesn't do anything to show the reader why helping others is bad, except say that hey, one nameless time you were screwed over by someone. I mean, tell me, what did they do to screw you over. Did you, say, give someone 5 bucks for gas and then get carjacked by them? (yes, bad example, but good irony). Work on really making people feel more. I think you can do it.
    | Posted on 2008-03-14 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]


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