throw in some examples if you could fit them in. relay more reasons why you aren't obligated to help anyone. i selfishness/nihilism. i like the last two lines. i enjoyed this a lot.
Hmm.I believe in karma(well sthg like this) so i kinda disagree with the helping people thing. but its great to voice out what you feel- and like you said, you felt the words coming to you. more metaphors maybe? ( :
Ok, wow, this is bitter. I found there were a good bit of spelling errors as well (ie, choices.) I didn't like it very much. It doesn't do anything to show the reader why helping others is bad, except say that hey, one nameless time you were screwed over by someone. I mean, tell me, what did they do to screw you over. Did you, say, give someone 5 bucks for gas and then get carjacked by them? (yes, bad example, but good irony). Work on really making people feel more. I think you can do it.
Submission Name: helpping people sucks
