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    dots Submission Name: A Perfect Sunny Daydots
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    Author: Frank Maguire
    ASL Info:    52 / UK
    Elite Ratio:    2.26 - 1727/1248/246
    Words: 134
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 154
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 874



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       Roll on summer !


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    dotsA Perfect Sunny Daydots
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    Morning comes, the sun it shines
    Not a cloud is in the sky
    Children play the linnets sing
    And lovers walk on by

    Flowers swaying in the breeze
    Apple blossom smells so sweet
    Silhouettes of summer time
    Cast shadows on the street

    Bees are buzzing with delight
    With pollen laden so
    Cattle roam the lonely hill
    And amble to and fro

    Boats set sail, to pastures new
    The ocean greets them well
    Waves now ebb and flow just right
    To create the perfect swell

    Silence gathers all around
    As the people stop and rest
    Time it seems to stop right now
    With a vigour and such zest

    Sitting by the rocky cove
    I wile my time away
    Such beauty far beyond compare
    On this perfect sunny day




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      From the vantage point of his idyllic cove the poet explores the simple rhythms of nature. The imagery is vivid and the contrasts stark and impressive : (read : Silence...rest...zest). I enjoyed reading the poem.
    | Posted on 2008-03-15 00:00:00 | by petrushka | [ Reply to This ]
      This delightful poem creates strong images, and whets one's anticipation of Summer's charm! Outstanding nature and outdoors write!
    | Posted on 2008-03-14 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      I loved the vivid imagery. It genuinely does fill me with a longing for summer. There is, however, a line that I think takes away from the poem.

    Cast shadows round the room

    It seems through all the rest as though you are outside, and thus it doesn't really make sense, and feels a bit like its only reason for being there, was to make a rhyme. That is just me though. The rest of the poem I very much liked.
    | Posted on 2008-03-14 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]


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