He’d waited so long to find it,
Where everything fell into its own place.
Each life is but a jigsaw puzzle waiting for the final piece
And although the edges are still a little rough and the corners have yet to be placed
He feels that his is now complete
Yet contentment brings company,
Fear rides upon its back as if a fiery mane
Whisping in and out of thoughts and dreams.
Teasing, with ideas of losing what has been so long sought
Forever he had promised
The forever promised, returned to him
But fear replies with thoughts of death
The final parting
Because sometimes
Forever isn't long enough
I love this piece. I wish that I could be in your mind when you write sometimes...i have read a few of your pieces and each time I am surprised to read what I do. You are a talented person.
It's crazy isn't it? How we beg and plead and sometimes we even pray, that our life would turn around and that everything would be great...that we would have everything that we would want; a best friend, a love, a relationship with our families. But as soon as it happens then we begin to lay those metaphorical bricks because we don't want to get hurt by what we wanted so much...we don't want to risk the chance of losing it.
I thought that i was the only one that felt this way...but I am finding myself with this problem right now. I have my first glance at love and here I am building this wall up so high that it is hard to find myself through all of the debris that lies around my heart and mind,
Well jimminy, that is enough about me. I am sorry to go on and on. Really all i was trying to say is that I know what you mean and thank you for writing something that really spoke to me.
This is different from your other pieces (or at least to me it is). I've had this feeling before. Sometimes things are so good they scare you or the thought of losing them scares you, yet somehow you cant help but do a little victory dance at the happiness you've managed to secure (all while hoping that the evil that would happily snatch it away didnt see you).
I'm trying hard to avoid saying that this is really good, but what the heck....this is really good.
I really like the 2nd stanza for the truth it holds.
the first stanza is good... particularly the 2nd and 3rd lines.
And the last line works well with this.
Ha! how about I just read your description of the work up above and realized that I inspired a new style of writing. *blushing*
Submission Name: Forever
