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    dots Submission Name: Why Is Coffee Bitter?dots
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    Author: Magnolia Steele
    ASL Info:    30/female/Northwest CA
    Elite Ratio:    4.71 - 2491/1823/230
    Words: 191
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 158
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1349



    Description:
       A poem about the common plight of a black woman in this world.


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    dotsWhy Is Coffee Bitter?dots
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    Hard...
    it is hard for her
    to be soft in this world
    defined by plastic,
    when she was shewn from
    stone and plaster...
    a smile, that don't mold
    to her face.
    Hard...
    is the word that weighs
    on her shoulders,
    it burdens her every step,
    through a desolate land
    of tobacco faces, etched in time,
    laughing at the sun,
    night time is there time,
    they don't need to be seen to be noticed.
    Hard...
    to comptemplate a future,
    when she is lost in the present,
    rent is late,
    lights off,
    no need to see she
    have reached rock bottom.
    Hard...
    is it to
    shake
    shake
    shake
    her moneymaker
    when she is broken,
    and the world keeps
    spinning her out of orbit.
    Midnight child, reaching for the stars,
    coming home empty handed.
    Hard...
    to ignore the cries of her babes,
    on the brink of starvation.
    Put on her superwoman cape,
    and see what good can you do,
    pretend to be Jesus, and stretch one meal into three.
    Hard...
    she feels,
    as she shows the universe the dark side of the moon,
    an eternal eclipse
    to hide what matters most,
    herself.




    Submitted on 2008-03-14 19:49:27     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      You have a few spelling errors. At the beginning, 'define' sounds like it should be 'defined' and somewhere near the upper middle you wrote 'compteplate' when it should be 'contemplate'. Chances are, these were probably just slips of fingers when typing, but I figured that they should be pointed out... could just be my pedantic nature.

    I think that this poem is an interesting depiction of even just the the lower middle class/lower class adult life; not necessarily just a black woman's life. As a teenager, this is almost like a warning. "Adulthood isn't all that it's cracked up to be." It discusses the responsibilities that can't be ignored and the difficulties if you aren't making enough money to support yourself and your family.

    In retrospect, does this necessarily have to be a poem about a black woman? I can personally see it spanning to peoples of any race, color, religion, sexual orientation... pretty much anyone.
    | Posted on 2008-03-15 00:00:00 | by Stygian | [ Reply to This ]



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