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    dots Submission Name: One flew over the Cookoo's nestdots
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    Author: atonement
    Elite Ratio:    2.71 - 106/186/98
    Words: 175
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsOne flew over the Cookoo's nestdots
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    I can't breathe.
    I can't think.
    Twists and turns with muffles weeps.
    LET ME OUT.
    OH GOD
    LET ME OUT
    Please don't tell me this is what they call:
    Insainty

    Dripping faucets.
    Shakes.
    Sweats.

    Nurse, this is just what I feared.
    In out In out In out In out

    Rigamortis Rigamortis
    Is she dead?
    Nothing left in the brain-dead girl's head.

    OUT OUT OUT

    Demons leave.
    Demons go.

    I am not religious,
    but I am a metaphorical foe.

    Scream in the oxygen mask.
    In out In out In out In out

    Jummbled words put together to create this asylum bound melody in an insainty fit.

    In out In out In out In out In out





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