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Danger

Author:	tennisfuzz
ASL Info:	21/F/wandering.
Elite Ratio:	5.72 - 79 /98 /40
Words:	169

Class/Type:	Lyrics /
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So my friend that is in a metal band asked me to write a dark song for them. I've never written lyrics, and they wanted it very simple lol.... So it was kind of fun. It's not very loquacious, but sounds quite... um growly... when sung by their singer... haha. thought it would post it for fun.

Personally, I think it's one large cliché, but it seems to be what they are looking for

Danger

I’m livin’ in a dark world
But darkness is no stranger
You wanna’ to come to my world
Well I think you’d be in danger

(chorus)
I think that you should just back off
I suggest you walk away
I think that you should get out of here
And save yourself, before it’s too late
(chorus)

You talk about redemption
Saving me from this dark life
But I promise you I’m past due
I’m bleeding from this dark knife

(chorus)
I think that you should just back off
I suggest you walk away
Leave this place while you can
because I can’t save you, from this darkness I create
(chorus)

I wanna’ live in your world
Away from all these sorrows
But how can you forgive me?
I’ll be this dark tomorrow

(chorus)
I think that you should just back off
I suggest you walk away
Don’t waste your time with me dear
Because I’ll just become, the one you hate
(chorus)

Submitted on 2008-03-15 12:44:09 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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Love it. This sounds a lot like one of my friends. Always pushing people away, afraid to get close 'cuz they'll get hurt and thinking that they are not good enough to be cared about by anyone. This is kinda your typical dark lyric seen in many places but it is still good. You are very talented!

--Oli

| Posted on 2008-07-06 00:00:00 | by Oli | [ Reply to This ]

I was jamming to this one! Cliché or not...
I used to have a Gothic Ska band and I wrote the songs and most of the music. So for what my opinion is worth- this would work very well when sung all 'growly', as you put it... Hahaha!

I think the verse :
"You talk about redemption
And saving me from this life
But I promise you I’m past due
I’m bleeding from a dark knife"

may flow a bit better if you said :
"You talk about redemption
-Saving me from this dark life
But I promise you I’m past due
I’m bleeding from this dark knife"

You know you had fun writing this one!

*peace, love & hand-grenades*

-Ceyx

| Posted on 2008-03-15 00:00:00 | by Ceyx | [ Reply to This ]

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