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    dots Submission Name: applesdots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 102
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsapplesdots
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    iíve wicked back
    the beast of my body
    with autumn fingers
    over olive skin
    while small children,
    with tiny eyes
    like apples for the seeding,
    stare at the trainwreck in my chest
    that just keeps beating.

    & i need rest from this deleting.
    but iíll build that bridge after iíve crossed it.

    one summer evening
    i counted all my eggs
    before they were layed.
    perhaps thatís why the plans that were hatched
    never stayed.
    & iím afraid
    because all that i have left
    are the shells of myself that iíve displayed
    & the mistakes that i have made
    in loving.




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      You appear rather distraught in this- rather torn up. The images are absolutely fascinating and you have such a unique turn of phrase that just makes me wonder hmmm. Never thought of it that way.
    | Posted on 2008-05-19 00:00:00 | by isis_lenore | [ Reply to This ]
      i like the line about the bridge the most. the lines that begin with & would be better off using the word. over all i liked it a lot.
    | Posted on 2008-03-16 00:00:00 | by dorianrydell | [ Reply to This ]


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