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    dots Submission Name: Shattered Piecesdots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       November 2007


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    dotsShattered Piecesdots
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    I stand here watching you fall apart,
    feeling as if I am helpless to intervene.
    I need only to help fix your heart,
    picking up the pieces of your soul.

    Feeling as if I am helpless to intervene,
    I wish only to pull you back to me.
    For anyone looking at this morbid scene,
    your world is shattered with nowhere to go.

    I need only to help fix your heart,
    back to your feet I will help you go.
    With love being sweet life's bitterly tart,
    but I am here so pour out your soul.

    Picking up the pieces of your soul,
    placing them in your shaking hand.
    Please allow my love to fill the hole,
    and brother and sister we'll defy the world.




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