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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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       December 2007


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    Darkness of heart,
    broken lonely souls.
    Giving up the fights,
    crying for the knife.
    Wanting nothing more,
    having nothing else
    begging for death,
    clinging to life.
    The darkness is mine,
    born to hide and die.
    Hating me for it,
    breaking all you are.
    my sweet and tender
    cyanide kisses,
    My softly wispered,
    words like razors.
    Refusing to remember,
    my love was always hers.
    I was yours,
    without a doubt.
    But my soul is to her,
    she and none other.




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