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    dots Submission Name: Name Your Poison...dots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
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       December 2007


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    dotsName Your Poison...dots
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    Love is my poison,
    it brings only pain.
    Love is my substainance,
    it pierces my soul.
    Longing for your sweet kisses,
    your silky slicing words.
    My cracked and bleeding lips
    long for your tender touch.
    Beloved, heal me.




    Submitted on 2008-03-15 19:33:30     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      *applaudes you* I like your use of imagery in this one. It really made me imagine what was going on and it had a subtle point to it. Love really is a poison.
    | Posted on 2008-03-17 00:00:00 | by Fallyn Angel | [ Reply to This ]


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