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    dots Submission Name: Cheatingdots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 42
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       December 2007


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    dotsCheatingdots
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    She never crossed his mind,
    his beautiful wife.
    He never heard a sound,
    only fealt the knife.
    Her heart was broken,
    shriveled was her soul.
    He was her beloved,
    she gave her love whole.
    If only he'd been faithful.




    Submitted on 2008-03-15 19:34:34     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this poem.. it made me think about my own past and what happened to me and it touched me deeply. You did a nice job on the rhyming and all. Well written I must say.
    | Posted on 2008-03-17 00:00:00 | by Fallyn Angel | [ Reply to This ]


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