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    dots Submission Name: Internally Deaddots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       January 2008


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    dotsInternally Deaddots
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    Looking through these eyes,
    inside looking out.
    Never blinded by lies,
    seeing only truth.

    Dead to the beauty,
    dead to the world.
    Yet calm of mind,
    your soul is unfurled.

    Emotions are truth,
    feelings are lies.
    Looking through these eyes,
    I know beautiful peace.




    Submitted on 2008-03-15 19:55:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Wow! You've moved me like I could never be moved. I wish i could express the amount of movement that has happened to me but words can't describe my feelings with this poem. I mean ... just... WOW! Pure amazing and awesomeness. I must say you are talented and you're younger than I. I cannot believe you could do something so magnificent or anything like this. I can't wait to read more of your work. I enjoy it every second and it brings back memories as well, which is good for me in a way. Thank you.
    | Posted on 2008-03-17 00:00:00 | by Fallyn Angel | [ Reply to This ]


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