Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Internally Deaddots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 47
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 471
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 354



    Description:
       January 2008


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsInternally Deaddots
    -------------------------------------------


    Looking through these eyes,
    inside looking out.
    Never blinded by lies,
    seeing only truth.

    Dead to the beauty,
    dead to the world.
    Yet calm of mind,
    your soul is unfurled.

    Emotions are truth,
    feelings are lies.
    Looking through these eyes,
    I know beautiful peace.




    Submitted on 2008-03-15 19:55:09     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Wow! You've moved me like I could never be moved. I wish i could express the amount of movement that has happened to me but words can't describe my feelings with this poem. I mean ... just... WOW! Pure amazing and awesomeness. I must say you are talented and you're younger than I. I cannot believe you could do something so magnificent or anything like this. I can't wait to read more of your work. I enjoy it every second and it brings back memories as well, which is good for me in a way. Thank you.
    | Posted on 2008-03-17 00:00:00 | by Fallyn Angel | [ Reply to This ]


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    159046

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    What happens written by Wolfwatching
    the living moment written by ShyOne
    More then just goodbye written by faideddarkness
    Sunset written by rev.jpfadeproof
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    Carry written by saartha
    Summer written by layDsayD
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (4) written by endlessgame23
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (final) written by endlessgame23
    Devils in the Details written by endlessgame23
    World I No Longer Want written by ForgottenGraves
    Fasade written by jackz
    Etiquette written by saartha
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (7) written by endlessgame23
    Your Lover written by Cordell
    I Do, I Do written by poetotoe
    102.3 written by rev.jpfadeproof
    The Azores written by poetotoe
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Blood Stains Are The Worst written by ForgottenGraves
    Still Fighting See? written by ForgottenGraves
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    Red Barn written by rev.jpfadeproof
    Ache written by rev.jpfadeproof
    written by Daniel Barlow
    Whiteout written by layDsayD
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    Dashboard Light written by layDsayD

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry