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    dots Submission Name: Forsakendots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 97
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       January 2008


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    dotsForsakendots
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    I watch you run away,
    fearful of your fate
    while my vision becomes gray....

    All you ever say
    is you are oh so great.
    I watch you run away...

    In my bed, I lay
    remembering of late
    while my vision becomes gray...

    Each and every day,
    you superiority state,
    I watch you run away...

    My blood it flows away,
    heart quickly slows its rate
    while my vision becomes gray...

    I forever beg you stay,
    With my heart upon this plate,
    I watch you run away
    while my vision becomes gray...




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