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    dots Submission Name: Hersdots

    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 86
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       February 2008

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    I bare my soul to her,
    praying she will understand.
    I give my heart to her,
    hoping with me she'll stand.

    Praying she will understand,
    I give her all I can.
    Wishing I could be different,
    for her a better man.

    I give my heart to her,
    an offering of affection.
    I beseach of her her love,
    it's beautifully painful perfection.

    Hoping with me she'll stand,
    knowing it cannot be so.
    I fear I've lost her for ever,
    and I've nowhere to go.

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      its beautiful, and i love it, good job :)
    | Posted on 2008-04-06 00:00:00 | by BarleyBreathing | [ Reply to This ]

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