Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: I Blame Lovedots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 262
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
    Total Views: 662
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 1498



    Description:
       February 2008


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsI Blame Lovedots
    -------------------------------------------


    This is when I was torn,
    the first time I knew love,
    the reason for which I fell apart.
    This is the story of my heart,
    of how I fell in love with you,
    now I will tell how it began

    This was the day the end began,
    it was when my heart was torn,
    The day I first spoke to you.
    I was in hate with love,
    I felt as if I had no heart,
    as if my soul was ripped apart.

    This is what tore my world apart,
    the reason this sadness began,
    the reason you broke my heart.
    While I felt my soul was torn,
    with me you fell in love,
    our disaster began with you.

    How unfair I should blame you
    when I tore your world apart,
    when I was first to fall in love.
    Truly it was my fault we began,
    my fault your heart was torn.
    Why did you let my steal your heart?

    How did I steal your heart?
    Was I so close to you
    that we didnít notice reality torn
    and our worlds ripped apart?
    Was our fate set when we began,
    that we would be destroyed by love?

    Still in us exists love,
    not yet have I lost my heart,
    not how I feared when this began.
    To tell the truth I still love you,
    and this fact tears me apart,
    this is why I am torn.

    When began our painful love,
    I was torn by my heart.
    Now only you tear me apart.




    Submitted on 2008-03-15 19:58:33     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||


    Think Feedback more than Compliments :: [ Guidelines ]

    1. Be honest.
    2. Try not to give only compliments.
    3. How did it make you feel?
    4. Why did it make you feel that way?
    5. Which parts?
    6. What distracted from the piece?
    7. What was unclear?
    8. What does it remind you of?
    9. How could it be improved?
    10. What would you have done differently?
    11. What was your interpretation of it?
    12. Does it feel original?



    159049

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.

    an unashamed poverty written by Daniel Barlow
    The Severed Head written by HisNameIsNoMore
    the living moment written by ShyOne
    More then just goodbye written by faideddarkness
    Physician, Heal Thyself written by WriteSomething
    winners circle written by ShyOne
    descent written by TheBadSadMan
    Every..... written by jackz
    a safe place written by Daniel Barlow
    You read free written by poetotoe
    untitled written by ShyOne
    mimicry written by expiring_touch
    Supernatural Cowboy Sleuth (2) written by endlessgame23
    Cosmic Dreams written by Chelebel
    Yes written by poetotoe
    The Old Mill written by Wolfwatching
    Waiting written by Daniel Barlow
    Shi written by ShyOne
    Your Lover written by Cordell
    Or are we written in the sand? written by Chelebel
    Carry written by saartha
    prison written by ShyOne
    Sleep Talk written by Queen_of_spades
    4th Season of Vivaldi written by HisNameIsNoMore
    i've missed written by mysalvation
    Silent Screams In Silent Dreams written by poetotoe
    PEARL (Exclusive Poem) 10th Anniversary... written by Cordell
    Deep Into A World Of Despair written by DeathTone
    I AM THANKFUL FOR written by Ramneet
    a mood to be free written by Daniel Barlow

    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry