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    dots Submission Name: I Blame Lovedots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 262
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       February 2008


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    dotsI Blame Lovedots
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    This is when I was torn,
    the first time I knew love,
    the reason for which I fell apart.
    This is the story of my heart,
    of how I fell in love with you,
    now I will tell how it began

    This was the day the end began,
    it was when my heart was torn,
    The day I first spoke to you.
    I was in hate with love,
    I felt as if I had no heart,
    as if my soul was ripped apart.

    This is what tore my world apart,
    the reason this sadness began,
    the reason you broke my heart.
    While I felt my soul was torn,
    with me you fell in love,
    our disaster began with you.

    How unfair I should blame you
    when I tore your world apart,
    when I was first to fall in love.
    Truly it was my fault we began,
    my fault your heart was torn.
    Why did you let my steal your heart?

    How did I steal your heart?
    Was I so close to you
    that we didnít notice reality torn
    and our worlds ripped apart?
    Was our fate set when we began,
    that we would be destroyed by love?

    Still in us exists love,
    not yet have I lost my heart,
    not how I feared when this began.
    To tell the truth I still love you,
    and this fact tears me apart,
    this is why I am torn.

    When began our painful love,
    I was torn by my heart.
    Now only you tear me apart.




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