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    dots Submission Name: Never Were...dots
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    Author: Vampiric Death
    Elite Ratio:    2.27 - 133/159/91
    Words: 147
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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       March 2008


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    dotsNever Were...dots
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    Pasts of beautiful darkness
    filled with strong emotion,
    they rise &&I wish it wasn't so,
    I wish you were here with me...
    but alas you are not mine,
    no longer, never were...

    Filled with strong emotion,
    I give in &&let it end,
    let my defenses fall
    into your bitterly sad,
    beautiful love, you're mine
    no longer, never were...

    They rise &&I wish it wan't so,
    pray it is but a dream...
    unjustified betrayal fills me
    &&tears my mind away,
    yet I am yours
    no longer, never were...

    I wish you were here with me...
    or wish I was far away.
    this darkness fills me,
    hurtful bliss,
    beautiful suffering
    no longer, never were.

    But alas you are not mine,
    &&I hate me for it...
    now fool-y over you,
    or so my true lies say.
    I must now pretend...
    no longer, never more.





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