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    dots Submission Name: FORGOTTENdots

    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 130
    Class/Type: Poetry/Depressed
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    Iím not sure what happened to your memory
    Not sure how in a second you forgot about me
    What has me even more confused
    Is the way I let myself be used
    Iím not sure what happened that night
    how you found yourself in her place
    How you looked down at her and didnít see my face
    When you look in my eyes you see mirrored blue
    She looks at you and sees right through
    Havenít I been so good to you
    didnít I love you enough
    didnít you love me too
    When did I lose
    What did I do
    Iím not sure what happened to me
    Not sure what happened to you

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      I think the most persistent question that persists after an unfaithful love is why? and what did I do?

    This was heartbreaking, but an excellent write Angel!
    | Posted on 2008-03-16 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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