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    Author: layDsayD
    ASL Info:    29/f/florida
    Elite Ratio:    3.16 - 264/243/147
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
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    I was brilliant color
    I was vibrant song
    Swaying dancer
    Laughter echoing
    A smile you loved
    I am gray
    I am little whisper
    Corner hider
    Drowning tears
    Eyes you killed
    Where did I go
    How did I allow it




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    I do love the beginning of this -

    the color, the sound, the dance - the being alive in it all.
    As well, I understand when it goes away,
    becomes gray, the feeling of smallness, and the how did I get here.

    I like that the title is light... as it is always changing. Sometimes bright, sometimes dark.
    I suppose the trick is finding a happy in the inbetween.

    A short piece, but there is an honesty here that I can appreciate.
    | Posted on 2008-10-30 00:00:00 | by isabella | [ Reply to This ]
      the first half of this was amazing to me. i loved the imagry and pure energy it gave off. i believe the second half (all after "I am gray") could have been phrased a little differently, but i appreciate the piece none the less.

    | Posted on 2008-03-23 00:00:00 | by stasisindarknes | [ Reply to This ]
      And, let there be light! And, may you again become the light of his life!
    | Posted on 2008-03-16 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]


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