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    dots Submission Name: weeding out weeds from the floradots
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    Author: blackbird
    ASL Info:    31/male/reykjavik iceland
    Elite Ratio:    2.35 - 194/328/300
    Words: 271
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsweeding out weeds from the floradots
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    in sleep,
    i speak a story
    like the inside of a violet heart.
    through my two lips
    the tulips flower from my gently honeyed tongue.

    the blue orchid of my inside eye
    taps the shoreline
    like tiny earthquakes
    across the smooth pebbles of your skin.
    i wish to feel the palm of your love
    in my island.

    the sky seems to hiss in prayer
    above me, in a cone.
    this is where i find the grace
    to feel again
    what i once said must not be felt again.
    i refuse to surrender,
    but i'll find my edges
    & work my way towards yours.

    time,
    & its gargalesis
    marches me down yet another artery inside me.
    but spring,
    in it's fashion,
    has a way of weeding out the weeds from the flora.
    i'll keep to the tiny triggers of the wood,
    the ancient moss that speaks our names
    into the trees.

    although the water of my body
    is refusing to heal,
    i still stand stark in the warmth of the sun,
    shake the dust from my eyes
    & stare into some new future
    that happily ever after
    i never planned for.

    the gold of iceland
    is still amongst me
    & i will wait
    for the drum of my feet
    to give in to the badland fates.
    a cave
    where the earthquake of my mother's body
    was my first poem.

    the circle of my life
    is spinning towards heavens hand
    & i've found an angel
    hidden in the fire of the world.
    but the question remains,
    will my river
    lead me from my tongue
    into your mouth?




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