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    dots Submission Name: Rapedots
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    Author: Brianna_rose
    ASL Info:    14
    Elite Ratio:    3.44 - 11/13/13
    Words: 196
    Class/Type: Poetry/
    Total Views: 248
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 1295



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       The poem speaks for itself.
    -Brianna


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    dotsRapedots
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    My dignity gone.
    No innocence left.
    My body bruised, and beaten.

    You're on top of me now.
    Sliding your hands down my top.
    I scream and scream, please get off.

    Theres a smirk on your face.
    Controlling me, holding me down.
    A drip of sweat, falls to my face.
    Mascara staining my cheeks.

    You're unbuttoning my pants now.
    I try and force you off.
    The harder I try, the more it hurts.
    I give up, you won.

    You're getting up now, leaving me alone.
    You whisper a threat, into my ear.
    Leaving me in tears, bundles of fear.

    A few days go by, I haven't stopped crying.
    Inside it feels, as if I'm dying.
    My virgined body, now torn up inside.
    You had your way, are you now happy?

    I'm living in fear, afraid to be alone.
    Worthless, whore, you scum; these thoughts going threw my mind.
    If I was so good, I would've left you behind.

    Horrifying flashbacks, every second of the day.
    I cry myself to sleep, hoping this will all be a dream.

    My body, torned.
    My innocence, gone.
    My mind, corrupted.






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      As far as your poem goes I think you expressed your feelings and thoughts into the perfect poem. I applaud you for that. Very well written.

    As far as the topic of your poem goes I know what it feels like to be raped by somebody actually by three somebodies. I'm sorry it happened to you and I hope you'll find your way out of the hurt and out of the pain. I'm not saying that the pain will go away but it will most likely get easier. I'm at the point where I'm starting to let myself be alone with certain guys, but not every guy. My suggestion to you is to slowly try to get all the anger, the hurt, the tears out. But not quickly because then it might affect you in a negative way and it might backfire. I tried that and all I ended up doing was hurting myself and ended up hiding the pain and then eventually I slowly got it out again. You have to find somebody who you trust to help you out when you feel like you have nobody else. I have no other advice right now but just hold on and be strong.
    | Posted on 2008-08-17 00:00:00 | by Rachel Ruff | [ Reply to This ]
      This was really well written. It's hard for anyone to read something like this because while the poem was so well written, it hurts to know you had to go through this. None of us who commented on here know you, or at least I'm guessing, and yet we can all feel it, whether we've been through this or not. That shows a lot about your writing. If you can affect stangers like this with your words, you are a very powerful writer.

    Nice Write
    ~*~katara~*~
    | Posted on 2008-04-15 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]
      Rape. Don't roll your eyes at me, but this poem reminds me of the book 'speak.' The whole book is about a freshman high schooler who got raped at a summer party when she was drunk off of beer and she didn't tell anyone about it at all. The poem reminds me especially the excerpt of where the main character is telling about how she got raped... basically the quote goes something like, 'he hurt me, hurt me, hurt me... and then got up and left'..' or something. xD Forgive me, i am a scatter brain (I thought I took notes on that part, lol)
    Frantic horror.

    D:

    Virginity for a girl is such a fragile thing to lose...
    | Posted on 2008-03-22 00:00:00 | by Mieko | [ Reply to This ]
      Great poem, so sorry it was inspired that way. Don't want to seem like your shrink, but it'll all be okay. I've been there, I know the feeling of being dead inside, of being defiled, and sinful. But it wasn't your fault. You're still young with much to learn. You couldn't have known this monster had these plans. Keep your chin up, everything will work out. And you do need to tell somebody. Keep up the awesome work, and I'll keep reading

    »Haely«
    | Posted on 2008-03-17 00:00:00 | by MinervaBlu | [ Reply to This ]
      Hey! Your not dead inside yet.I'm in your position but not in your shoes because I was'nt raped.I say your not dead because you wrote this and caught my attention beacause I definitely stoppped eating but anywa. Hey Brianna it seems we all need friends and for someone to take that away from you and others makes me wanna write fight poems.You should really keep writing,you expressed yourself finely but I'm not sure if I wanna give you the critique I want b/c I take this piece so seriously.Well ok......5stars but remember this.No matter how horrible you feel WRITE DO IT b/c this s*** will keep you alive.It's a drug of freedom of speech and creativity and you proved that to me.Your gonna need friends here if you ever decide to make them which you've probly already have but ne way one day you should gather everything you have inside and confront this jerk not for revenge but b/c he
    made you stronger,believe me in time you will be stronger.Just don't give up this. RG
    | Posted on 2008-03-17 00:00:00 | by Rex Gold | [ Reply to This ]



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