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I Don't Love You

Author: GoKart Mozart
Elite Ratio:    5.47 - 131 /93 /49
Words: 65
Class/Type: Poetry /Love
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Just a little something.

I Don't Love You

If I don't love you
Then why does my heart
Jump when you walk in?

If I don't love you
Then why does my heart
smile when you cross my mind?

If I don't love you
Then why does my heart
sing when you smile at me?

If I don't love you
Then why does my heart
When you walk away?

Submitted on 2008-03-16 20:12:51     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  This was really good. It was to the point, and actually reminded me of someone. When I read the title, I thought this was like a poem I wrote, the guy thinks he loves me, but he doesn't and I don't love him.
But I think this is really sweet and well written.

Nice Write.

| Posted on 2008-03-18 00:00:00 | by daughterofdeath | [ Reply to This ]

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