This is pretty much my life story. It's like how come everyone can be happy, but I can't. It's like I have nothing to do but be alone. The poem is just so simply put, your emotions are just laid out in the poem. It is really well written, and I agree with Bethany, i give it a 6 out of 5 too.
I hate this. The feeling, I mean, not the poem. Hum. This is probably not going to be a very good comment, as I am exhausted, but I thought I'd stop by and at least say... something.
Hmm. I like the repetitions--much like a thought process, which is something I enjoy reading. (I also enjoy *having* thought processes ) Anyways. Nicely done. Hopefully I will get around to leaving you a more substantial comment.
I know exactly where you're coming from, Max. It is a horrid this, but you have managed to illustrate it beautifully. While it is vague in its description of your feelings, it gets the raw emotions across powerfully enough that the words don't matter so much as the meaning.
Max, I know how you feel. I've felt this way, too. I'm around people that love each other for who they are but...nobody really knows who I am. So I feel like I'm unloved and alone. I feel invisible and unwanted. But I know everything's okay because at least one part of me knows the real me. And I haven't found that part yet, but I will someday.
Brilliant Max! Pure bliss! It made me tear up just thinking about it. It made me think of my own past and what it was like. I just hope this isn't your destiny Max. Everyone needs someone. I should know. But brilliant work Max!
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) Anyways. Nicely done. Hopefully I will get around to leaving you a more substantial comment.