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    dots Submission Name: Falling back Monday...dots
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    Author: Ceyx
    Elite Ratio:    5.69 - 111/107/81
    Words: 261
    Class/Type: Poetry/BrokenHeart
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    dotsFalling back Monday...dots
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    Falling back Monday ::: Waking up Tuesday





    Iím sinking /// I forgot how to drown
    Head above water
    -with my feet on the ground
    Youíre shallow around me
    I've been dying to tell you:
    The pain that you left
    ///
    Was a better friend than you were

    -Causing tears to fall
    But I'm better off than you are
    I canít even swim
    But still, Iím staying above you
    ///
    And believe it or not
    ...
    I still fucking love you

    Falling away; my ankle twists
    Bloodied my nose and
    ---split my wrists
    See me now?
    ...See me now!?!

    Wading in the consequences of your actions
    Caught up in the morning paper's recent retractions
    :::Iíve got one for you:::

    I'm sinking /// I forgot how to die
    Head below water
    -Iím too tired to try
    You're shallow all around me
    Still, I find myself drowning
    The pain that you give
    ///
    Is a better friend than anyone

    Shunned and alone
    And still better off then you are
    I can't even float
    But still, Iím staying above you
    ///
    Believe it or not
    ...
    I still fucking love you

    Falling behind; my vision blurs
    Bloodied my sheets
    ---and then I bloodied hers
    Hear me now?
    ...Hear me now!?!

    Wading through the consequences of your actions
    Caught up in your tiny life's recent distractions
    :::Was I just one to you?:::





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    "Iím sinking /// I forgot how to drown
    Head above water
    -with my feet on the ground
    Youíre shallow around me
    I've been dying to tell you:
    The pain that you left"


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