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    dots Submission Name: Grow Downdots
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    Author: Mud
    ASL Info:    18/f/India
    Elite Ratio:    2.84 - 55/89/46
    Words: 41
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    I hate to watch you grow old -

    Cholestrol,
    Your legs ache,
    You forget,

    Your back aches,
    You worry,
    You forget.

    And you have stopped being delighted when you see a flower

    like you used to.




    Submitted on 2008-03-17 13:00:01     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Yes, indeed! (but should we NOT grow old? Is a pistol to the temple a better solution? I think not!) nicely, if strangely done throughout... bravo .....
    | Posted on 2008-03-19 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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