Writingpoetry

[ Join Free! ]
(No Spam mail)

dotsdots
nav
  • RolePlay
  • Join Us
  • Writings
  • Shoutbox
  • Community
  • Digg Mashup
  • Mp3 Search
  • Online Education
  • My Youtube
  • Ear Training
  • Funny Pics
  • nav



    nav
  • Role Play
  • Piano Music
  • Free Videos
  • Web 2.0
  • nav



    << | >>
    poetry


    dots Submission Name: Whyd it have to happen....dots
    --------------------------------------------------------





    Author: Shikida
    ASL Info:    19/USA
    Elite Ratio:    0.8 - 0/2/7
    Words: 188
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Depressed
    Total Views: 813
    Average Vote:    4.0000
    Bytes: 1390



    Description:
       The dangers of drinking and driving or driving while on drugs, The hurt that happens to the innocent bystanders


    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsWhyd it have to happen....dots
    -------------------------------------------


    Sudden stop, blackness falls
    Knock on the door
    Mother cries, father calls
    Just to make sure

    CH:
    Speeding
    Late for work
    Intoxicated
    They’re just reasons
    That cause sadness
    Like this

    On her way home
    To her parents it seemed
    So strange
    That just moments ago
    They were talking to her
    On the phone

    Now, they’re heading downtown
    To identify her corpse
    A victim of a hit and run

    CH:
    Speeding
    Late for work
    Intoxicated
    They are just reasons
    That cause sadness
    Like this

    Her Friends hear,
    The shocking story
    hits the news
    Teenager killed, no criminal found
    They cant understand
    And how they gonna tell her
    Boyfriend

    He falls to his knees
    How can this be
    Why did it happen to her
    He wishes he could
    Take her place in Heaven
    To god he pleas

    CH:
    Speeding
    Late for work
    Intoxicated
    They are just reasons
    That cause sadness
    Like this

    Sudden stop, blackness falls
    Knock on the door
    Mother cries, father calls
    Just to make sure


    Why it have to happen
    To her…




    Submitted on 2008-03-17 13:52:12     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
    Submissions: [ Previous ] [ Next ]

    Rate This Submission

    1: >_<
    2: I dunno...
    3: meh!
    4: Pretty cool
    5: Wow!




    ||| Comments |||
      Well, it flows excellently. I really like it; it seems to cut off at the right spots. I love the chorus. It is just perfect! It makes me feel kind of sad and ..well.. caught up in something unstoppable. However...


    He wishes he could
    Take her place in Heaven

    That part seems to jump unnaturally...
    | Posted on 2008-04-12 00:00:00 | by SweetAndOhSoME | [ Reply to This ]

    Be kind, take a few minutes to review the hard work of others <3
    It means a lot to them, as it does to you.


    Google
     


    poetry

    dotsLogindots

    User Name:

    Password:

    [ Quick Signup ]
    [ Lost Password ]


    January 10 07
    131,497 Poems
    Posted

    I have 14,000+ Subscribers on Youtube. See my Video Tutorials

    [ Angst Poetry ]
    [ Cutters ]
    [ Famous Poetry ]
    [ Poetry Scams ]



    FontSize:
    [ Smaller ] [ Bigger ]
     Poetry
    New users can only get up to two comments without commenting.