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    dots Submission Name: no longer heredots

    Author: Sharati_hottie
    ASL Info:    20/ Female / MICHIGAN
    Elite Ratio:    4.02 - 86/81/90
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/Serious
    Total Views: 1005
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
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       how I feel in my mind.

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.

    dotsno longer heredots

    hiding in plain sight
    with everyone looking
    but not able to find

    the person I was
    is no longer here
    and that is why

    I can hide in plain sight
    & no one will find me
    I am no longer there

    but they continue
    searching everything
    never to find me again

    Submitted on 2008-03-17 15:24:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      I like this, but I cant explain why. Thus, making this comment more complicated then I expected/intended. I have had this feeling and every now and then it comes back. I think that sometimes the people that are looking cant see because they arent necessarily looking for you, they are looking for what they want to see or what they thought they had seen and because it was never there, or no longer is...whats evident becomes invisible. At first glance I was struck at how small the poem was, but when I read it I thought that the simplicity helped add to the emptiness that the poem conveys.

    So, overall good read.

    Until we write again,

    | Posted on 2008-03-18 00:00:00 | by inkonspikuous | [ Reply to This ]

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