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    dots Submission Name: Nightmaresdots
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    Author: Fallyn Angel
    ASL Info:    19/F/CT
    Elite Ratio:    3.23 - 44/53/46
    Words: 54
    Class/Type: Poetry/The pain inside
    Total Views: 95
    Average Vote:    5.0000
    Bytes: 356



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    dotsNightmaresdots
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    Rip me, tear me, beat me or kill me.
    Either way I'm going to die, it's my destiny.
    Monsters come alive.
    It's air I strive.
    Slash, rip, bleed, and die.
    No one can say goodbye.
    Nothing can stop him.
    I'm almost a phantom limb.
    I was so close.
    Now I'm nothing but a ghost.




    Submitted on 2008-03-17 20:49:05     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Very WELL done. I don't really have much to say about this but if I had to say somthing I would say to change the last line because people have diffrent views of ghosts, to some people ghosts are peaceful "spirits" and so it doesn't really make sense in this "nightmare" type of way. Anyway, bravo, like your friend said above lol.
    | Posted on 2008-05-13 00:00:00 | by Moon2thestars | [ Reply to This ]
      Once again the surreal to ther "rescue" full of possible double, triple and quadruple meanings? Nicely hammered together here, indeed... bravo... bravo... bravo... michael
    | Posted on 2008-03-19 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]


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