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    dots Submission Name: Paranoiadots
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    Author: Morsketch
    ASL Info:    21/F/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.6 - 27/26/26
    Words: 78
    Class/Type: Misc/Misc
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    dotsParanoiadots
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    Creeping shadows in the night,
    Whispers over shoulder’s flight,
    A never ending
    Pitch black plight,
    Falling over me.

    Creepy crawlers every where,
    Twisting every tiny hair,
    Tracing over
    My blank stare,
    Clawing in the night.

    Haunts of an evil dead,
    Wrapped about my blind head,
    Choking me like
    Weighted lead,
    Chained about my neck.

    People’s eyes staring here,
    Their blank and empty ghostly leers,
    Always bringing
    Me to tears,
    Steak knives to my heart.




    Submitted on 2008-03-17 20:58:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      i like this. it's dark. I love the last part; "Always Being me to Tears" - im not sure how you meant this metaphor to be but urh, i think it's like paranoia injures the paranoid the most ??? Definite fav.
    | Posted on 2008-03-18 00:00:00 | by rosesrouges | [ Reply to This ]


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