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    dots Submission Name: Suddenlydots
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    Author: webdevil
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 113/105/43
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Nature
    Total Views: 595
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    Description:
       Just flowing been quite a while


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    dotsSuddenlydots
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    Here on this earth
    In this beautiful world
    there is everything to smile at
    even as the rain
    suddenly
    and slowly comes down
    with a promise
    that life will always
    be regenerated
    as long as breath is
    and the purpose of vision
    excites the imagination
    even as the sun
    suddenly
    and patiently shines through
    showing the way
    in flesh and spirit
    even as your thoughts
    suddenly
    and hopefully yearn
    for expression.




    Submitted on 2008-03-18 05:33:58     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      Hmm very nice. I think there might be a format issue which kind of hurts the flow a little bit but nothing that effects the purpose of the poem good job.
    | Posted on 2008-03-18 00:00:00 | by MaxHam | [ Reply to This ]


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