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    dots Submission Name: Shedots
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    Author: webdevil
    Elite Ratio:    3.2 - 113/105/43
    Words: 56
    Class/Type: Poetry/Passion
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    dotsShedots
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    Hair that swells the wind
    eyes that blind the sun
    lips that own love
    what is your name.

    Fingers that stroke desire
    mouth that pouts satisfaction
    hips that provoke imagination
    what is your name.

    Breasts proud and priceless
    tongue soft like wine
    grace sure and true
    what is your name.






    Submitted on 2008-03-18 05:47:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Short and sweet and you managed to describe someone in a few stanzas very impressive. Kind of reminds me of a Door's song called "Hello, I love you." If you haven't heard it give it a try it may be a song you want to sing to this person haha.
    | Posted on 2008-03-18 00:00:00 | by MaxHam | [ Reply to This ]


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