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    dots Submission Name: Life I livedots
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    Author: b_v_grant
    ASL Info:    23/M/Jamaica
    Elite Ratio:    3.27 - 125/118/69
    Words: 331
    Class/Type: Lyrics/Love
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    dotsLife I livedots
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    Verse 1

    My crashing pride came down on my face,
    Cuz I cant believe you hurt me this way.
    The worst part is that you didn't really thought so,
    But I've got a million scars on me to show.
    I bet you cant find one,
    That you dont know.

    Chorus

    This is the life I live,
    The life I thought was love,
    It's been my mistake,
    To think you were sent from above.
    You will never change,
    I wont give another chance.
    You can keep your I love yous,
    Thats no longer true

    Verse 2

    You tried so hard to make things right,
    But what happen on all those nights...,
    You left me broken up with no hope in me,
    But like it or not its the way its ought a be,
    You gotta find yourself before you can ever find me.

    Chorus

    This is the life I live,
    The life I thought was love,
    It's been my mistake,
    To think you were sent from above.
    You will never change,
    You will always be the same,
    So keep your I love yous... I know were...never true

    Bridge

    Remember those days I told you the way that I felt,
    That I'd be lost without you,
    I'm never going away....
    I guess holding onto memories has never done me any good.

    So over,
    We're so over....

    Chorus

    This is the life I live,
    The life I thought was love,
    It's been my mistake,
    To think you were sent from above.
    You will never change,
    I wont give another chance.
    You can keep your I love yous,
    Thats no longer true....
    This is the life I live,
    The life I thought was love,
    It's been my mistake,
    To think you were sent from above.
    You will never change,
    You will always be the same,
    So keep your I love yous
    Thats no longer true











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    ||| Comments |||
      Honestly, i didn't care for this piece. Not because it wasn't well written, because for the most part, the timing structures and rhymes flowed well. But alot of the material used seemed cliché, and didn't have much explanation behind them. It made me think of a sappy radio ballad.
    | Posted on 2008-04-05 00:00:00 | by hybridsongwrite | [ Reply to This ]
      Excellent verse and song! Many years ago, I belonged to a small band and sang and played Guitar! I lived in Nashville, Tenn. for awhile, and it seemed like every young man there was an aspiring song writer. You have talent, Brian! This one is very good!
    | Posted on 2008-03-21 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      wow. very nicely penned(or typed? lol). anyway, the words and phrases you used really have an effect on the emotion(particularly the reader, i me right now.lol). anyway, i read some other of your lyrics. they're really very mature and heartfelt.
    | Posted on 2008-03-18 00:00:00 | by rosesrouges | [ Reply to This ]


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