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But I Do.


Author: wovenwords
ASL Info:    19/F/Washington
Elite Ratio:    2.46 - 108 /303 /189
Words: 154
Class/Type: Poetry /Misc
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Sometimes the simplest way to say it is the best way.


But I Do.



I know
that you had a cat for 16 years
and it was your best friend for five
and you really don't like cats now
but I do.

And I know
that you had a red-haired girl for two years
and you loved her on the seaside
and you'll never get over your first love
but I will.

And I know
that all you do is lie around
and your motivation melted in the sun years ago
and your brain is filled with air
but mine's not.

And I know
that you're more serious than you wish
and you'll have frown line wrinkles when you're old and gray
and your heart is a little constricted from the wear of the years
but mine's not.

And I know
that you like to write
but it's only humorous stuff
and you don't understand my poetry, at all,
but I do,
I do.




Submitted on 2008-03-20 02:18:19     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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  It takes you through series of times and that feel in itself exudes nostalgia.

I thought it was very well and simply constructed. My favorite stanza was the fourth one. I suppose I understand why Lucy and Anna thought this could be sad...but it's not exactly sad though.

Hmm...

Suven
| Posted on 2008-03-22 00:00:00 | by Suven7 | [ Reply to This ]
  I'm not sure how this made me feel. It was like sad and then I'm not really sure. But that's not a bad thing. I love is when poetry confuses my emotions :P

Anna
<Aethyx>
| Posted on 2008-03-21 00:00:00 | by Aethyx | [ Reply to This ]
  :-( This made me feel really sad. But I liked it...

And that's really all I have to say...
| Posted on 2008-03-20 00:00:00 | by LucyDiamond | [ Reply to This ]


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