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    dots Submission Name: "I" Souldots

    Author: Joachim
    ASL Info:    75 Male RSA
    Elite Ratio:    5.39 - 361/264/178
    Words: 142
    Class/Type: Deep Thought/Longing
    Total Views: 681
    Average Vote:    5.0000
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    dots"I" Souldots

    "I" Soul.

    My Soul was Lost,
    When my Body became Matter
    My Essence Shrouded in Sweet Darkness.

    Covered in the Mists of Ages
    My Essence a Glimmer
    Like a far off Star Warped in Blankness.
    I formed Endless Space.

    My Soul Thoughts Frozen,
    In a Capsule of Captured Time.
    Like Endless Eternity Forever Stretching seeking.
    I am Soul a Prisoner Bonded to my Ethereal Dream.
    Fantasy Surreal Apathy!

    Awaiting the Hand of Embodiment
    To Gently Shatter My Surreal Dungeon Walls.
    Vanish fantasy surreal apathy!
    I Soul then Become The Splendor of my Essence.
    With Eternity Gently Covering my Space.
    I Soul vibrate to the Frequency of my True Essence,
    An angel Splendid in my Arraignment.
    Covered with the Stars of Ultimate Space,
    Shining like the Sun - I Soul,
    Will become Free!

    Submitted on 2008-03-20 03:59:40     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      This is such a gorgeous piece... I love the line "With Eternity Gently Covering my Space"... it's so serene and profound at the same time. The many words capitalized randomly was getting me a bit confused at one stage since I immediately tend to put emphasis on that specific word but I guess that gives even more meaning to the words.

    I love every line! Well written and brilliantly composed.
    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by Beulah | [ Reply to This ]

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