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    dots Submission Name: Presentlydots

    Author: Epiphany
    ASL Info:    42/F/Universe
    Elite Ratio:    4.38 - 3342/2139/390
    Words: 44
    Class/Type: Poetry/Happy
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       "Who ever lov'd that lov'd not at first sight?"

    Shakespeare, As You Like It

    Love, Peace, Joy, Grace, Faith!!! ; > }

    Make the font bigger!! Double Spacing Back to recent posts.


    To sit at peace
    amidst the noise;
    In awe of all
    the gifted Joys.
    Butterfly glides
    on painted wing,
    Colorful birds
    of nature sing.
    People driving
    to and fro;
    Coming, going
    do they know?
    Summer wind
    caress my brow...
    Life's precious
    here and Now!

    Submitted on 2004-06-30 11:50:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      Superb flow and rhyme. You've managed to capture an older, a better, style. The simplicity alone makes it a unique piece--keep up the good work and don't change your style!

    ~James "Alexian" Neal
    | Posted on 2004-06-30 00:00:00 | by alexianx | [ Reply to This ]
      I may be wrong but I think the cadence in the last lines could use another beat, and I would make it

    Life is precious
    here and now.

    Another sweet one both to the ear and heart.
    | Posted on 2004-06-30 00:00:00 | by Sandburg | [ Reply to This ]
      I like this. You have used some very positive colourful words. Differnt structure that makes it unique. Nice write keep it up.
    | Posted on 2004-06-30 00:00:00 | by Broken | [ Reply to This ]
      another positive piece...nice imagery...make me feel it...short and sweet and oh so lovely...another epiphony...nicely done...
    | Posted on 2004-06-30 00:00:00 | by Kristina9178 | [ Reply to This ]

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