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    dots Submission Name: Postmortemdots
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    Author: The Gadfly
    ASL Info:    52/M/Moreno Valley, CA
    Elite Ratio:    3.55 - 1048/1348/375
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 590
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 617



    Description:
       A quatrain

    Happy Easter


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    dotsPostmortemdots
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    To think that I shall one day die,
    and not be held in Death's strong grip;
    yet hear my slave chains break, then slip
    and fall, as I, in freedom, fly.

    The moments all too quickly flee
    but I recall who paid my debt;
    this price so high at last was met.
    In debt no more, I am set free.

    Postmortem glance into the grave,
    exposed the Devil's fatal flaw:
    the bait and switch he never saw;
    a piercing barb was sure to save.


    The Gadfly











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      I love the rhyme scheme. It flows really nicely, which is one thing I seem to have a problem with. I like how you didn't hold back.

    Anna
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    | Posted on 2008-03-21 00:00:00 | by Aethyx | [ Reply to This ]


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