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    dots Submission Name: "He Smiles While He's Asleep"dots
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    Author: Ron Cole
    Elite Ratio:    3.87 - 1932/1321/203
    Words: 112
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    Description:
       Here is another selection from my "Cat A Logue" for my friends here at Elite who like cats.


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    dots"He Smiles While He's Asleep"dots
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    Sleek and graceful they,
    creatures once considered gods!
    They grace our Hearth and grace our homes;
    Their grace mankind applauds!

    Mysterious and sometimes aloof
    their mystic, haughty stare,
    seems to go through eternity
    as though the Gods were there!

    Heralded by myth and mystery
    with ghostly stealth and grace,
    their innocent gaze beguiles
    most humans at anyplace!

    Myth has it that the cat
    saved God a Scorpion's bite,
    hence God gave special powers
    to this champion of the night.

    So, while many beasts must work
    and burden for their keep,
    the Cat's allowed to rest and play,
    and he smiles while he's asleep.

    Ron Cole
    March 2008




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      Very well done Ron! Our cat Sir Henry makes me smile each day with his attitudes and antics! You capture the spirit of the cat well and a fine ode!
    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    tif
    | Posted on 2008-03-31 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      I must say that I found this quite cute, Ron......

    An amazing mixture of myth and reality, here, producing a very cute effect..............

    ......the whole way you have gone about seems a bit weird, or maybe, quite different, but that has just added to the speciality of the poem...a unique way to portray the appearance of a cat who 'smiles in his sleep'!

    I couldn't help smiling at this - and I am sure all the other readers would have smiled at your smiling cat, too.

    Good idea, well written and great job!
    | Posted on 2008-03-25 00:00:00 | by mdsouza | [ Reply to This ]
      Ah, Bast will bask briskly in this one! The cat is, indeed, as is said of the Spinx: a mystery wrapped in an enigma! and you have shown that most defly in this poem! bravo... bravo... bravo...
    | Posted on 2008-03-24 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]
      Your talent shines through again here Ron. Your ability to find the 'take' and 'slant' on things is quite admirable.

    A joy to read.

    Frank.
    | Posted on 2008-03-23 00:00:00 | by Frank Maguire | [ Reply to This ]
      It's no wonder that cats were once considered gods...
    they certainly can act as though they believe it themselves,
    yet they still choose to grace us with their presence.
    You've caught the feline feeling in this poem
    ~purrrfectly!
    (I cant refuse a good pun...or purr!)

    Thanks for sharing this delightful read.
    | Posted on 2008-03-22 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      You're never disappointing, that is ur work, always a treat to read... Kuddos

    Brian
    | Posted on 2008-03-21 00:00:00 | by b_v_grant | [ Reply to This ]
      I doubt I even have to say that I love this poem, Ron. You mention the word "cat" and I'm hooked! On a side note, I was studying my cats' eyes the other evening (watching the slits close as the light in the room brightened) and felt almost "spooked" by how magnificent their eyes looked under the lamp's light.

    Your lines,
    "their mystic, haughty stare,
    seems to go through eternity
    as though the Gods were there"
    captured the feeling I got perfectly.

    You can write cat poem's for me anytime, Ron!!

    :-)
    Sharon
    | Posted on 2008-03-20 00:00:00 | by Peggy Paris | [ Reply to This ]
      I really like this poem....because i love cats....i have a cat and she thinks she is "Miss Thing".......really great poem!
    -Amber-
    | Posted on 2008-03-20 00:00:00 | by never_far_away | [ Reply to This ]


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