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    Author: Aethyx
    ASL Info:    14/f/sc
    Elite Ratio:    4.04 - 25/23/15
    Words: 73
    Class/Type: Poetry/Longing
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    I'm so helpless
    There's not much I can do
    I want to blow my brains out
    I want to be with you

    Why did I have to move?
    I could have prevented it all
    But now I'm 400 miles away
    And not just down the hall

    Sometimes late at night
    I go outside to have a smoke
    I stare up at the starless sky
    With tear stained eyes I cry




    Submitted on 2008-03-20 12:04:39     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      In the first and second verse the 2nd and 4th lines ryhmed, but in the last verse the last two lines did...it kinda seemed weird.

    Anyways, it was something I think alot of people can relate to from some part of their life.
    | Posted on 2008-03-30 00:00:00 | by entropy | [ Reply to This ]
      kinda messed up the flow o n the last part. it's quite succint, clear-- it seems to stick with your common theme. and hey... you r name is imilar to mine.... cool. Aren't AE's so good? What's your names meaning for you?
    | Posted on 2008-03-20 00:00:00 | by AeThe Lost Poet | [ Reply to This ]


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