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I'm not really sure about this poem. Interesting is the only thing I could say about this poem.
Like an angel with those broken wings
So beautiful and yet so sad
That angel longs to fly
But is constantly being held back
That angel longs to die
But the razors have been snatched
That angel longs to cry
But those tears have long since been dry
That angel wants to heal
But you've ripped those wounds open again
That angel is a little girl
And also that old man
That angel is everyone
Who has ever had that plan
That plan to fly
That plan to die
That plan to cry
That plan to heal
What does that angel have
And yet that angel
That angel still wants to die
But keeps fighting on
Submitted on 2008-03-20 12:20:01
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Correct me if I'm wrong, but I think this is about how everybody wants to help someone at some point in their life, but can't. Despite this they struggle on in life?
Anyways, I think the only thing I would change is that the 5th verse says want instead of long, like all the ones before that, and that kinda messed up the flow.
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