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    dots Submission Name: Asylum dots
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    Author: Spin
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 51/66/54
    Words: 81
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAsylum dots
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    Tip toe,
    silence
    quite violence
    screams in my ear
    questions asked daily
    Am I crazy?
    Fat and Lazy
    Depressed
    Hazy blades of concrete
    Shave city streets
    So close
    Irritated conscious be
    infuriating
    bold and cold
    to kill and be killed
    he said she said
    stairs so crooked
    the silence grows like mold
    flows like wine
    from the hands sublime
    bleeds bright red
    spoon fed to the mouths
    of passing clouds
    only to dissipate
    into the masturbating hands
    of God himself




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