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    dots Submission Name: Localedots
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    Author: SpartanSteve
    ASL Info:    20/m/texas
    Elite Ratio:    3.85 - 41/54/45
    Words: 1107
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
    Total Views: 55
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    Description:
       Here's the first little snippet. I figured the second part was a story unto itself and the first part hardly went with it. My insight into loss, human attachment and the replacing of loved ones.

    A man was 12 once. He had a best friend that lived next door, and they would take long hikes through the woods with their pellet guns and machetes. They’d talk about girls and sports and their favorite wrestlers. They boasted about their accomplishments. They crossed creeks on long-since fallen trees that had rotted to the core, both moving very delicately to avoid ruining their school clothes.
    One day, one boys dad got a job on the whole other side of the state. They spent as much time around eachother as they could. But sure enough, after a month, one boy moved off to the other side of the state, promising to call or to come visit for a week in the summer. Both were sad, but recovered quickly. Neither tried to speak to the other again. Contact was lost, years went by. Their whole lives went by, and they almost completely forgot eachother, but neither ever felt quite right again on leisurely strolls through the woods. Though they were both mostly unaware of the peculiar sensation of mingled sanctity and longing for some missing piece, they came to enjoy a lonesome stroll with a machete for clearing brush.


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    A woman was a weekend gardener. After

    work she would work in her little field, just a

    recreational activity at first. Later, she began

    selling her tomatoes and jellies made of peaches.

    She set up a wagon on the side of the road. Just a

    trailer really, with a hitch so she could pull it with

    the old truck that her father had left behind when

    he died. This activity seemed to connect her to him

    in a distant way. He sat with her when she drove.

    He still coached her when she turned too sharply

    or didn’t brake fast enough.


    She smiled when her right rear tire blew out when

    she exited off of the interstate near her and her

    husband’s house. He told her to keep all of the lug

    nuts in her pocket while she changed the tire or

    she’d lose them. Don’t put the jack under the back

    bumper, put it under the axle. Put the jack back in

    the tool box as neatly as she found it or he

    wouldn’t let her use it again.


    She sold her fruit a hundred yards or so up the

    road from the main filling station in town. Just a

    place to fill up coming home from work at the

    refineries and a place where the good old boys sat

    around and shot the breeze, sipping beers around

    the counter to avoid the steeper prices at the local

    bars. The guy that inherited the station from his pa

    didn’t care much about the laws that said no one

    could consume on the premises. Hometown rituals

    ran deeper here than state laws.


    Her customers were a fairly wide assortment of

    people. Some of the older women in town who still

    had families around to cook for bought her produce

    because hers was fresher than the local

    supermarkets offered. Other gardeners, more and

    less committed to growing things, would stop in to

    peruse her produce. Men in their mid 20s and early

    30s would browse just long enough to make

    good-natured passes at her. She politely gave

    them all a cold shoulder, and it was her politeness

    that kept them coming back around. Most of the

    same faces showed up each week, and after a

    while she came to know them all by name.


    People showed up again and again. Not a whole

    lot of money ever exchanged hands, but plenty of

    stories did. Lots of gossip was exchanged, little

    theories and nuggets of local lore with as many

    previous owners as any old dollar bill.


    But as with all good things, one more had to come

    to an end. Someone official took notice of the

    placement of her store, and one of the local state

    troopers who frequented her shop to share her

    company had to ask her to relocate to one of the

    designated Farm to Market roads in town. She

    didn’t mind much at first. Afterall, her whole stand

    was just a trailer. She hitched it to her dad’s old

    truck, hauled it off 10 miles or so to the nearest FM

    road and parked it in a shady spot.


    After a few days, though, she realized that most of

    her regulars weren’t coming anymore. She wasn’t

    on their way home from work now. A few new

    faces showed up, but seldom did an old one. It

    reminded her of when she had first opened her

    stand. No one here knew her. She didn’t have first

    names to match to the faces she talked to

    anymore. All of the time she had spent helping the

    people who stopped by when she was located off

    of the freeway was just a memory.


    On the fourth day of her new location, she

    began to wonder if she had the energy for this

    anymore. Maybe it was time to call it quits. Afterall,

    her garden wasn’t really for profit. All she had ever

    wanted was a hobby. A way to take the edge off of

    work. Something to do while she waited for her

    husband to come home from work. She stood on

    her perch, behind the baskets full of tomatoes and

    cucumbers and jars of peach jelly, and wondered if

    she should call it a day early.


    Just before she made up her mind to leave,

    she saw a familiar old Crown Vic begin easing over

    onto the shoulder. As it neared, she saw the state

    trooper who always stopped to share her company

    and enjoy the afternoon sun. He stepped out and

    tipped his hat and leaned on the counter the way

    he always did when they would idle away half an

    hour with the other regulars.


    He asked how business was doing and what

    she thought about her new spot. She tried not to

    sound upset about it, but she obviously wasn’t

    very happy. Business was okay, but she was

    dealing with a whole group of new faces that it

    might take weeks to start warming up to. They

    talked about it for a while, and when it was time

    for him to get back on his patrol he bought a jar of

    jelly and said he’d stop by whenever he could until

    things began picking up for her. She thanked him

    and after he left she reconsidered going home

    early and decided she wouldn’t. There would just

    have to be some more quiet days before things

    would start to seem as exciting as they did before.




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