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    dots Submission Name: With This Pendots
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    Author: darkened_soul
    Elite Ratio:    3.38 - 812/868/171
    Words: 127
    Class/Type: Misc/Love
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    dotsWith This Pendots
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    With this pen I sit writing
    Aspiring to tell you all I feel
    Yet the words can't find their way
    To a place for you to hear.

    With this chill down my spine
    I'm longing to feel your touch
    Your arms wrapped around me
    I miss it very much.

    With this smile on my face
    I think about our past
    Everyday was another aide, to
    A love that would forever last.

    With this breath I struggle
    Trying so hard to get some air
    Like every time you say "I love you"
    That feeling, how much you care.

    With these words I sit here
    Hoping to keep you here, with me
    'Cause I love you more than anything
    I only hope you can see.




    Submitted on 2008-03-20 22:16:45     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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