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    dots Submission Name: Rethinkdots
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    Author: forfila
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 354/310/188
    Words: 171
    Class/Type: Prose/Serious
    Total Views: 821
    Average Vote:    4.0000
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    dotsRethinkdots
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    Confusion greets the tables of power
    Dialogues to promote peace, the speeches of leaders
    It all slides as uneffective for todayís war
    It is not a flag, it is not nations or races fuelling the comrades who fight
    Suppression is the motive, a silenced history their cause,
    The calls to listen, falling on deaf ears for generations
    We awaken as towers fall, instead of anger, I feel remorse
    Our fathers, and their fathers have brought poverty across resource rich lands
    Fuelling our own riches, not seeking to understand

    It is not they didnít care, it wasnít a lacking humanity
    It was a greed as foremost intent for actions, moving forward and expanding
    but not noticing the symptom of pushing other cultures backward
    As a new young western generation we need to hear their cries
    We need to learn a little, and make a little sacrifice
    In time the anger may subside, and poverty may reduce
    The reward of that is far greater than materialistic belongings can produce.





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    ||| Comments |||
      It is a very thought provoking piece,,,, but it reminds me of a less known massacre,,, In 1947, when my country India got freedom ( and also an amputation) ......... soon Pakistan sent a train over-loaded with corpses,,, in a few days a similar train went to Pakistan as well. (different religions etc...etc... so maim, dishonour, kill, feast,,,)

    Or perhaps i don't know who did it first ..... historians are usually history twisters,,, so i don't know but HEY COME LETS ENJOY FREEDOM !!!!

    Nice work forfila,,, I am a cynic in these matters.
    | Posted on 2008-03-21 00:00:00 | by Parul garg | [ Reply to This ]


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