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    dots Submission Name: She is in my Dreamsdots

    Author: forfila
    Elite Ratio:    3.12 - 354/310/188
    Words: 99
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
    Total Views: 1009
    Average Vote:    4.5000
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       Just dont over think it

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    dotsShe is in my Dreamsdots

    Kissing the lips of passion
    Igniting insides of lovers souls
    To caress, to hold

    Envelope my fires in your wisdom
    Touch my fantasies with your inner beauty
    Roam free with me
    Dream with me
    Naked in the sands of time

    Hold me tight and kiss these lips
    free each other from the worldly grips
    Dance through celestial paths
    Brushing our skin across the stars
    In love
    In selflessness and in earnest

    Kiss me my love
    I know who you are

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      Envelope my fires in your wisdom
    Touch my fantasies with your inner beauty

    I loved these lines. What a beautiful poem. I love the universal, ethereal quality put forth in the expression of the love. Especially in the last two lines of the poem. It makes me think of the poetry of a fey philosopher. Kiss me my love/ I know who you are. Beautifully written.
    | Posted on 2008-03-22 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      Very romantic! I especially liked these lines:

    "Dance through celestial paths
    Brushing our skin across the stars"

    Where would we all be if naught for love?
    | Posted on 2008-03-21 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]
      Happy Day Matt! This piece is about endless love and for me also represents a spiritual connection - something that is never lost and is found in love.
    love,peace,joy,abundance & smiles to share
    | Posted on 2008-03-21 00:00:00 | by Epiphany | [ Reply to This ]
      A kind of dream-fantasy-romance... yes, highly romantic, indeed... most well and most ably done throughtout... I liked it muchly... bravo...
    | Posted on 2008-03-21 00:00:00 | by Algol46 | [ Reply to This ]

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