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    dots Submission Name: ~lie in wait~dots
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    Author: Ceyx
    Elite Ratio:    5.69 - 111/107/81
    Words: 95
    Class/Type: Poetry/Death
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    dots~lie in wait~dots
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    Purple tendrils wait for me
    Contraceptive pills taken orally
    Hastening my hand to trace
    The door that my mind has erased
    I know what lies in wait
    Behind this structure awaits my fate
    My skin chilled; crawling- lets out this warning:
    Do not open the door.
    Simply, it must be morning
    The state of safety has yet to comfort me
    I know in the back of my mentality
    Purple tendrils lie in wait for me…




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      it's cute. kinda insane asylum-esk. i hinks it's a nifty little peace. i approve
    | Posted on 2008-03-26 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
      yeah, definately gotta be high to write this one. Aint no purple tendrils in reality unless you're in a room with a bunch of naked guys who've had their weenies whacked by Pinochios nose while he's high and doing a Stevie Nicks impression. Now, thats some puple tendrils I tell ya.

    But you get a B+ for creativity.

    Thanks for sharing.
    | Posted on 2008-03-21 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]


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