~lie in wait~ by Ceyx

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Submission Name: ~lie in wait~ dots

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Author:	Ceyx
Elite Ratio:	5.69 - 111/107/81
Words:	95

Class/Type:	Poetry/Death
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~lie in wait~ dots

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Purple tendrils wait for me
Contraceptive pills taken orally
Hastening my hand to trace
The door that my mind has erased
I know what lies in wait
Behind this structure awaits my fate
My skin chilled; crawling- lets out this warning:
Do not open the door.
Simply, it must be morning
The state of safety has yet to comfort me
I know in the back of my mentality
Purple tendrils lie in wait for me…

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Submitted on 2008-03-21 10:55:13 Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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it's cute. kinda insane asylum-esk. i hinks it's a nifty little peace. i approve
| Posted on 2008-03-26 00:00:00 | by in shadow | [ Reply to This ]
yeah, definately gotta be high to write this one. Aint no purple tendrils in reality unless you're in a room with a bunch of naked guys who've had their weenies whacked by Pinochios nose while he's high and doing a Stevie Nicks impression. Now, thats some puple tendrils I tell ya.

But you get a B+ for creativity.

Thanks for sharing.

| Posted on 2008-03-21 00:00:00 | by hyproglo | [ Reply to This ]

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