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    dots Submission Name: A Dream of Maedots

    Author: Algol46
    ASL Info:    200/m/East of Eden
    Elite Ratio:    2.72 - 1111/1235/613
    Words: 122
    Class/Type: Poetry/Love
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    dotsA Dream of Maedots

    I watched you bind your hair in silver twine
    And jewel it with rare gems from your teak chest.
    Your arms, in silken sleeves, you gently pressed
    Against your heart and made this dream divine.
    You pursed your lips which taste of sweet mulled wine,
    Your blue silk gown shows dragons that invest
    You with bold magics from the East, and West,
    Here in this grotto, at this antique shrine.

    But you are more than things, or words or gold,
    You are both spirit and a living girl,
    You are Godís goodness here so sweetly rolled
    Into a lovely, regal precious pearl.
    Then in my dream you deftly turned and swirled,
    And with a sigh you conquered all the world.

    Submitted on 2008-03-21 14:33:56     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I agree with the previous comments...
    this is an enchanting poem that is rich and full; its almost tactile in its texture.
    Lovely work...brilliant prose with just the right sorcery to make it magical.
    Thanks for sharing it.
    | Posted on 2008-03-23 00:00:00 | by latentlylyrical | [ Reply to This ]
      I think I have figured it out, I simply love your style of writing. The way you word things is always and unfailingly eloquent and evocative. (Not to mention, as my middle name is Mae, this poem had my name written all over it). I love the imagery that you used here. I believe last time I heard, that teak was african as far as where it grows, but something about the overall descriptions left me feeling like I was watching a Japanese concubine getting dressed in a kimono and walking amidst cherry blossoms. Anyway, I really liked this one.
    | Posted on 2008-03-22 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]
      I stand mesmerized by your ability to transform what could have been a simple poetic portrait into a tangible, visual magic of bringing character to life and bestowing it with such a power. The flow is superb in this one. Enchanting!
    | Posted on 2008-03-22 00:00:00 | by Porcelaine | [ Reply to This ]
      Some gal, this lovely Mae!!! This poem evokes strong word pictures, and is excellent in story, structure, and rhyme! Dream on, weaver of dreams!
    | Posted on 2008-03-21 00:00:00 | by Ron Cole | [ Reply to This ]

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