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    Author: isaiahc4
    ASL Info:    26/M/TX
    Elite Ratio:    3.26 - 120/198/62
    Words: 295
    Class/Type: Poetry/Venting
    Total Views: 523
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    Bytes: 1787



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       I'm sure that you can figure out what this one is about by the contents. just looking for thoughts. thanks


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    this is very hard for me
    I feel I can't return.
    the lesson you have taught me
    has been the hardest learned.

    I feel as though I'm overwhelmed
    afraid to be with you.
    Afraid to feel what I once felt
    and what you'll put me through.

    I'm a man of few fears
    few anxieties and few beliefs
    At this moment I am scared
    that loving you is no relief

    Some where we have traded
    what we had for this
    I left with good intentions
    but that was swing and miss.

    how'd we ever go so wrong
    were did this all start
    I gave you all my time
    I gave you all my heart

    you've taken all I've given
    you threw it all away.
    it was all forsaken for
    the pleasures of one day.

    who was he compared to me
    what skill did he posess
    to make you turn away from me
    and make me second best

    I did all this for you and me
    I did it for a future life.
    in doing this I never thought
    that I would loose a wife.

    Here I thought of us as strong
    unbreakable I thought our love.
    unbreakable is what it is
    this pain that I can't get rid of.

    I'm a man a simple one
    But simple men still dream.
    we still bleed and sweat
    and try to muffle every scream

    why would you force this
    what decission can I make.
    I built my world around a love
    that you have proven fake.

    my words to you are whispers of
    a former man who went away.
    so is the reason why I feel
    afraid to come back home today.




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