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    dots Submission Name: This Girldots

    Author: Mieko
    Elite Ratio:    3.98 - 253/209/99
    Words: 182
    Class/Type: Poetry/Satire
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    dotsThis Girldots

    There was a girl -
    this girl
    his girl.
    She had her own agenda,
    scraping the dirt off of people's faces.
    Remasking them as they'd run off to random places.
    Feeding them smouldering garbage, just
    so that they'd think she was...

    "If you have an idea, you should try not to waste it. But if you have no idea, you should try not to fake it."

    But she did that anyway, everyday.

    I met her once or twice, acting this way
    I was confused as to what to say
    She didn't seem to play,
    any differant than I

    As time went on I
    began to feel
    as if any held trust in her
    was all for naught

    A love felt
    was a trick seen
    his girl,
    this girl,
    that girl
    is not what she seems.

    And as they lay
    I for one wonder
    what (she) really means
    is he really the one?
    or is she simply...

    to scrape off his face.
    So he will tell her
    that she is

    Submitted on 2008-03-21 19:53:43     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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    ||| Comments |||
      This is a really good write that to me speaks perfectly of mhow some people live their life how others want them to live with disasterous circumstances
    I once was this person in fact for the longest time I honestly and truly didnt even know who the real Ron was
    It wasnt until I took control of my own life and lived it the way I thought it should be lived that things finally started working out and for the first time in my life I Honestly felt free
    Excellent work!!!
    I always enjoy reading your writes as they definately make me think about life
    God Bless
    Your Friend
    | Posted on 2008-06-17 00:00:00 | by Ronswords | [ Reply to This ]
      This really "speaks" to me. There are a lot of two-faced people I know, and they are always pulling that bull[censored]. I love the scraping off his face metaphor. Beautiful.

    | Posted on 2008-03-27 00:00:00 | by Aethyx | [ Reply to This ]

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