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    dots Submission Name: Ancient lights dots
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    Author: Spin
    Elite Ratio:    3.08 - 51/66/54
    Words: 61
    Class/Type: Poetry/Misc
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    dotsAncient lights dots
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    As I look to the sky
    ancient lights pierce eternal space
    each pulse, every beam
    takes 10,000 years to shine upon me
    tiny fossils set in spaces black rock back drop
    only I pray they don't stop shining
    that long ago all of the stars disappeared
    and we just haven't
    received the darkness
    in the stead of the 10,000 years.




    Submitted on 2008-03-21 20:18:14     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      I liked this to an extent. At first, I really got into it, thinking that you were somehow referring to, say, the lights of ancient rome or what have you. But then, by the time it got to be obvious that it was instead, starlight, the wording seemed a bit cold and clinical. I liked the premise and the start, but after that, it tapered down to being not too great. To me at least.
    | Posted on 2008-03-22 00:00:00 | by brokenmuse | [ Reply to This ]


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