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    dots Submission Name: T.I.A.P.Tdots
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    Author: Localfreak
    ASL Info:    30, Maybe, Here
    Elite Ratio:    5.19 - 102/106/67
    Words: 70
    Class/Type: Poetry/Comedy
    Total Views: 132
    Average Vote:    No vote yet.
    Bytes: 498



    Description:
       Lol, just quickly wrote this for another site.
    I hope it gets laughs and no "Deep" comments


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    dotsT.I.A.P.Tdots
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    Time and again I bleed
    Hurting from all you said
    Internment ,inside my mind
    Shouting "Set me free!"

    Inside I call your name
    Softly, then with raucous glee

    Alone again

    Pleading with a quiet voice
    Insanity, holding back
    Sure as ever you feel me
    Sure as life you hear me

    Together we were strong
    Alone I am nothing
    Killing myself inside
    Ending my misery in blood




    Submitted on 2008-03-22 16:28:17     Terms of Service / Copyright Rules
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      ha. I'm glad you wrote that description or I would have had to scold you for being lame and cliché. Nice gibe. I did get a giggle out of it.

    Keep writing
    ~Venia
    | Posted on 2008-03-24 00:00:00 | by Venia | [ Reply to This ]


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